The second version is slightly better, but still on the dark side and hazy looking.
Have you tried DeHaze (it will change the tones) and maybe use a Basic Adjustment (exposure etc) in Studio?
You can also enhance the image further with maybe using Details etc.
I played around a little and got this result (I hope you don't mind?) using Dehaze and Basic Adjustment and some minor tweaks using Precision Detail.
Of course you can use anything you like to fit your personal tastes.... maybe a little darker?